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    The drawing indicates a long banner with the word “volunteer” and a website about volunteering on it ,and lots of people is(改為are，主語為people，謂語動(dòng)詞用復(fù)數(shù))portarying(拼寫錯(cuò)誤，改為portraying) the outline of their hands to show sportive(改為support，此處應(yīng)表示的是人們對(duì)志愿者服務(wù)的支持，且show為動(dòng)詞，后面應(yīng)接名詞作賓語，而sportive為adj.，表示“運(yùn)動(dòng)的”).Simple as it is,the picture reveals an exciting phenomenon that more and more people are willing to be volunteers.As the society developments(改為develops，此處應(yīng)該使用動(dòng)詞形式), our material comforts are considerably enhanced, thus, we are capable of the time and energy to help others. At the same time,with(去掉，若使用with，句子則無主語) the moral climate is getting better, which is under everybody’s efforts,(加and，兩個(gè)句子之間應(yīng)該用連詞連接)the members of these volunteering organizations are mostly never asking for any rewards either on fame or money,so that the organizations can survive easily. It is hopeful that we will enjoy a more harmony(改為harmonious，more后面應(yīng)該跟形容詞，且后面的society為名詞，應(yīng)該用形容詞修飾) society in the future,if the things developes like this.Therefore,when we are eager to show our kindness,it is really necessary to keep our mind clear. For one thing, one should never give up once he begins to be a volunteer.For another,volunteer work is also a (去掉a，responsibility為抽象名詞，不能用不定冠詞修飾，)responsiblity(拼寫錯(cuò)誤，改為responsibility) (建議改為volunteer work also needs responsibility), just as our normal work,so do try our best.
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