Volunteers
    李彥妮
    遼寧省鞍山市鞍山一中10.14班
    There is a vivid saying that every glorious event is justifiably connected with volunteers who is a group of people, holding the fundemental to help others without pay-back benefits. In 1993, when the new word burt out among social society, most of us gave a slur to it in considering of economy. The special group, however, is just like a river - small at first, contained within its banks, flood passionally then merged into the sea, for the sense of moral considerations. And now, I quite support to be a volunteer.
    We can never forget these moving scenes: A group of adolecents from Beijing dashed to the City of Wenchuan who gave up their comfortable living situations and picked up the heavy burden to save people buried into the ground, while a middle aged white collar who threw away his computer and salary came here to fetch wictims' lives from the death. It is volunteers who rushed to this place which has suffered from the catastrophe that gave a great help to those victims in need. A volunteer can support a piece of sky, and this one reason I am eager to join them.
    Secondly, only a volunteer who is in active part in Beijing Olympic Games will he give a great help to those losers. It is volunteers who gave us a warm welcome to Beijing that put the glorious sports meeting from in chaos to in order. A person, as we know, who hasn’t join into the group of volunteer is one of the unfortunate victims of this society which is occupied with love. All of us are in high pressure in this adverse circumstance. Our mind catches hold of something and will not let it go, if we choose the way to argue with the mind, the stronger the will, the more fuitile the task, so we, should choose a way to help others, to see the smile from others. Then the pressure get out suiftly. I always go into rapture at a mere mention of being a volunteer and regard it as a person who is eager to help others or a group not in the same class with the suburban social-climbers. It seems a cliché but a saying which is an infallibility that a splendid case can not leave a volunteer just as a fish can not live without water.
    專家點評：作者盡量用到了一些高級詞語和句型，表明作者有一定的英語功底，但是小的錯誤頻發(fā)，如單詞拼寫，語法問題，句子邏輯，這在某一方面也表明作者的基本功有待提高，繼續(xù)努力。
    專家建議：用詞準確是寫作的基礎。對于學習英語的中國學生來說，背單詞擴大詞匯量是有必要的，但遺憾的是，學生們背的大都是單詞的“外殼”，記的大都是單詞的表意或字典提供的大致意思，而基本上忽視了詞在語境中的作用和詞的“精神”。這種只記單詞表意的學習方法對提高語言的運用能力，特別是寫作能力是極其不利的。