Computers
    常悅
    遼寧省大連市育明高中高二12班
    Computer is one of people's greatest inventions in the last centry. Meanwhile, it brings about as many problems as the convienience it offers. This essay will look at the advantages and disadvantages of computers.
    To begin with, there are numerous reasons to say computers do good to our daily life. Firstly, computers make it possible for students to gain knowledge online with a simple click, instead of ckecking thousands of books. A veriaty kinds of information on all subjects are stored in computers, available to everyone, Moreover, thanks to the computers, people can “talk” to others, who are millions of miles away, even overseas. Computers offer a great alternative of communication, which develops people's view and enables us to know different cultures. A third point is that computers make a great contribution to building up a globle village. By shopping online, one can buy Japanese sushi, HongKong clothings and Italian wine in America.
    Nevertheless, despite the advantages of computer, there're many drawbacks of it. First of all, because of the attractive computer games, many adolescents give up studying. Computers have a damage effect on youngsters' health and accdamic education, what's more, they even cause juvenile crimes. A second point is that when people get too used to communicating on computers, they loose their ablity of talking face to face. A report has shown that over 69% of people choose to use e-mails or tax messages to communicate. Furthermore, computers, in some degree, make developing and developed countries more devided, because while some countries are wired to communicate, others remain isolated.
    In summery, nothing has gained more praise and blame than computer. In my point of view, computer is just a tool. Its advantages and disadvantages mostly depends on how we use it. If we make a good use of it, it will be a great assistant of mankind.
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    作者基本掌握了議論文的寫作要領(lǐng)，只在文章個別之處邏輯存在一些諸如思維跳躍度過大的問題，另外就是有的表達不夠地道和準確。因此建議該考生在平時的學習中盡量多閱讀原汁原味的英語文章，有意識地積累地道的英語表達，不斷提高語言運用能力。
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    本篇文章段落結(jié)構(gòu)清晰明了，第一段作為引言段交代文章主題并且引出文章主題段落，第二段主要說明計算機的益處，第三段羅列計算機給人們帶來的害處，最后一段是對文章的總結(jié)和作者個人看法。整篇文章思路清晰，段落主題突出。文章詞匯運用較為高級與豐富，語法多樣性也有所體現(xiàn)。不足之處在于有個別語言點不夠地道，希望以后能進一步完善語言，使寫作水平進一步提升。