2014年11月8日雅思機(jī)經(jīng)：寫(xiě)作（新東方版）
Task 1
今日小作文為柱形圖，主要考察“average number of trips made by man and women by purpose in a certain European country in 2007”,人們旅游的動(dòng)機(jī)包括“travelling to work, shopping, visiting friends, taking children to school and day trip”。
寫(xiě)作分析：
因?yàn)榇藞D考察時(shí)間為2007，小作文時(shí)態(tài)要注意為過(guò)去時(shí);此外因?yàn)槭庆o態(tài)圖，對(duì)于題目中“不同出游目的”以及“男女出游”都需要進(jìn)行詳細(xì)的對(duì)比。
Task 2
Some people think most crime is the result of circumstances e.g. poverty and other social problems. Others believe that most crime is caused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
題目翻譯：有些人認(rèn)為大部分的犯罪是外部因素導(dǎo)致的結(jié)果，比如貧窮以及其他社會(huì)問(wèn)題。其他人相信大部分犯罪是因?yàn)槿诵皭旱谋拘运隆?BR> 考題分析：
此題屬于Discussion的題目，烤鴨可以采取5;5的寫(xiě)作模式，對(duì)題目中的犯罪是由于“外部因素”還是“本性”進(jìn)行雙面分析，然后表明自己的立場(chǎng)。文章的結(jié)構(gòu)很簡(jiǎn)單，除去開(kāi)頭結(jié)尾段，文章正文可以分為兩段分別討論“外部環(huán)境”和“本性”。本題所要討論的是犯罪到底由什么導(dǎo)致，毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)，二者都對(duì)犯罪有重要的影響。因此，在文章中間段中，可以著重討論一下二者的結(jié)合是犯罪的主要原因。
寫(xiě)作思路：
Introduction:
背景：犯罪會(huì)帶來(lái)毀滅性影響，危害社會(huì)的秩序和安定。(Crime, with wide-ranging and devastating effect, undermines the order and stability of the social security. )
改寫(xiě)題目：然而，罪犯所處的外部環(huán)境抑或罪犯本性導(dǎo)致犯罪行為是讓備受爭(zhēng)議的一個(gè)話題。( However, there are conflicting views on whether crime is determined by the circumstance or the evil nature of criminals. )但不得不承認(rèn)的是，外部環(huán)境與本性跟犯罪之間的因果關(guān)系并非很明確(the link of cause and effect between circumstance as well as nature and crime is unclear)。
Body paragraph1:
支持外部因素是主導(dǎo)因素的人們認(rèn)為(people in favor of the circumstance argue that )外部因素例如貧窮或者社會(huì)問(wèn)題會(huì)給人們的行為帶來(lái)深遠(yuǎn)的影響(far-reaching influence)。專家對(duì)于外部原因?qū)е路缸锍钟胁煌挠^點(diǎn)(experts hold different opinions about the circumstances leading people to commit acts of violence and crime)。研究表明憤怒、絕望以及需要錢來(lái)解決食物、避難和其他必需品等情況都有可能導(dǎo)致犯罪行為(Research has shown that anger, desperation, and the need of money for food, shelter, and other necessities may all contribute to criminal behavior)。在一些情況下，外部原因例如極度貧困、饑荒以及貧富差距過(guò)大的社會(huì)問(wèn)題的確是犯罪誘因(in some cases, external factors such as extreme privation, famine and the split between the rich and the poor undoubtedly motivate potential criminals to commit crimes)。例如，窮人為了謀生去販毒(to obtain money some people commit the crime of selling illegal drugs)或者社會(huì)的不公平滋生人們?cè)购耷榫w從而報(bào)復(fù)社會(huì)( the social inequity irritates resentment and leads to revenge on the society)。
Body paragraph 2:
然而，另一些人則強(qiáng)調(diào)本性在促使人犯罪這方面的重要性大于外部環(huán)境。人們考察人類心理和頭腦發(fā)育的方式很大程度上受到基因科學(xué)的影響(Today the way we consider human psychology and mental development is heavily influenced by the genetic sciences)。很多權(quán)威報(bào)道都已證明早起兒童階段孩子的行為深受其性格的影響(Numerous reports have proven that children’s behavior is heavily affected by their nature)。易怒的孩子往往控制怒氣的能力較差，往往也具有犯罪傾向(Children who are aggressive and violent are likely to have poor anger management, resulting in their criminal tendency)。若自控能力較差 (poor self-discipline) ，當(dāng)他們長(zhǎng)大成人，即使接受過(guò)高等教育，也有可能因?yàn)榉缸镄睦矶龀龇瓷鐣?huì)行為 (anti-social behavior)。
Conclusion：
個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)是，并不認(rèn)為外部因素或本性中的哪一個(gè)是引起犯罪的最主要原因(either circumstance or nature is the major influence on crime)，因?yàn)樗麄兌紦碛泻艽蟮挠绊懥?。外部因素與犯罪本性往往是相互影響的 ( are constantly interacting )，正是在這種相互作用下，犯罪的本性才得以形成，外部因素才得以發(fā)揮影響 (It is the interaction of the two that shapes a criminal’s nature and fulfills the influence of circumstance) 。
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Task 1
今日小作文為柱形圖，主要考察“average number of trips made by man and women by purpose in a certain European country in 2007”,人們旅游的動(dòng)機(jī)包括“travelling to work, shopping, visiting friends, taking children to school and day trip”。
寫(xiě)作分析：
因?yàn)榇藞D考察時(shí)間為2007，小作文時(shí)態(tài)要注意為過(guò)去時(shí);此外因?yàn)槭庆o態(tài)圖，對(duì)于題目中“不同出游目的”以及“男女出游”都需要進(jìn)行詳細(xì)的對(duì)比。
Task 2
Some people think most crime is the result of circumstances e.g. poverty and other social problems. Others believe that most crime is caused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
題目翻譯：有些人認(rèn)為大部分的犯罪是外部因素導(dǎo)致的結(jié)果，比如貧窮以及其他社會(huì)問(wèn)題。其他人相信大部分犯罪是因?yàn)槿诵皭旱谋拘运隆?BR> 考題分析：
此題屬于Discussion的題目，烤鴨可以采取5;5的寫(xiě)作模式，對(duì)題目中的犯罪是由于“外部因素”還是“本性”進(jìn)行雙面分析，然后表明自己的立場(chǎng)。文章的結(jié)構(gòu)很簡(jiǎn)單，除去開(kāi)頭結(jié)尾段，文章正文可以分為兩段分別討論“外部環(huán)境”和“本性”。本題所要討論的是犯罪到底由什么導(dǎo)致，毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)，二者都對(duì)犯罪有重要的影響。因此，在文章中間段中，可以著重討論一下二者的結(jié)合是犯罪的主要原因。
寫(xiě)作思路：
Introduction:
背景：犯罪會(huì)帶來(lái)毀滅性影響，危害社會(huì)的秩序和安定。(Crime, with wide-ranging and devastating effect, undermines the order and stability of the social security. )
改寫(xiě)題目：然而，罪犯所處的外部環(huán)境抑或罪犯本性導(dǎo)致犯罪行為是讓備受爭(zhēng)議的一個(gè)話題。( However, there are conflicting views on whether crime is determined by the circumstance or the evil nature of criminals. )但不得不承認(rèn)的是，外部環(huán)境與本性跟犯罪之間的因果關(guān)系并非很明確(the link of cause and effect between circumstance as well as nature and crime is unclear)。
Body paragraph1:
支持外部因素是主導(dǎo)因素的人們認(rèn)為(people in favor of the circumstance argue that )外部因素例如貧窮或者社會(huì)問(wèn)題會(huì)給人們的行為帶來(lái)深遠(yuǎn)的影響(far-reaching influence)。專家對(duì)于外部原因?qū)е路缸锍钟胁煌挠^點(diǎn)(experts hold different opinions about the circumstances leading people to commit acts of violence and crime)。研究表明憤怒、絕望以及需要錢來(lái)解決食物、避難和其他必需品等情況都有可能導(dǎo)致犯罪行為(Research has shown that anger, desperation, and the need of money for food, shelter, and other necessities may all contribute to criminal behavior)。在一些情況下，外部原因例如極度貧困、饑荒以及貧富差距過(guò)大的社會(huì)問(wèn)題的確是犯罪誘因(in some cases, external factors such as extreme privation, famine and the split between the rich and the poor undoubtedly motivate potential criminals to commit crimes)。例如，窮人為了謀生去販毒(to obtain money some people commit the crime of selling illegal drugs)或者社會(huì)的不公平滋生人們?cè)购耷榫w從而報(bào)復(fù)社會(huì)( the social inequity irritates resentment and leads to revenge on the society)。
Body paragraph 2:
然而，另一些人則強(qiáng)調(diào)本性在促使人犯罪這方面的重要性大于外部環(huán)境。人們考察人類心理和頭腦發(fā)育的方式很大程度上受到基因科學(xué)的影響(Today the way we consider human psychology and mental development is heavily influenced by the genetic sciences)。很多權(quán)威報(bào)道都已證明早起兒童階段孩子的行為深受其性格的影響(Numerous reports have proven that children’s behavior is heavily affected by their nature)。易怒的孩子往往控制怒氣的能力較差，往往也具有犯罪傾向(Children who are aggressive and violent are likely to have poor anger management, resulting in their criminal tendency)。若自控能力較差 (poor self-discipline) ，當(dāng)他們長(zhǎng)大成人，即使接受過(guò)高等教育，也有可能因?yàn)榉缸镄睦矶龀龇瓷鐣?huì)行為 (anti-social behavior)。
Conclusion：
個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)是，并不認(rèn)為外部因素或本性中的哪一個(gè)是引起犯罪的最主要原因(either circumstance or nature is the major influence on crime)，因?yàn)樗麄兌紦碛泻艽蟮挠绊懥?。外部因素與犯罪本性往往是相互影響的 ( are constantly interacting )，正是在這種相互作用下，犯罪的本性才得以形成，外部因素才得以發(fā)揮影響 (It is the interaction of the two that shapes a criminal’s nature and fulfills the influence of circumstance) 。
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